Review: Alpha Part One, by Abby Weeks

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Part of a series? Yes, it’s a serial.

Cliffhanger? Not exactly, but there’s no end as it is a serial.

Category: supposed to be an erotica serial.

Genre: Contemporary.

Self-published.

Pages: 64

Blurb:

Who is Holden West?
I’m not who you think I am.
Looks can be deceiving.
I’m good-looking, but I’m not a ladies man.
I’m beyond wealthy, but no one knows it.
I’m confident, but my heart has been broken.

Find out who Holden West really is through the eyes of Lucy Mayfair, the struggling waitress who works at his favorite diner. When she first meets Holden, all she sees is a tough, rugged auto mechanic who seems to carry a certain sadness wherever he goes. What she soon finds out is that there is more to Holden than she ever would have guessed.

 

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REVIEW:

 

I received this book via Netgalley for an honest review.

This book is the first part of a serial and while I’m starting to warm up to serials, this one completely missed the mark for me.

I hate writing negative reviews and I’m sure many other readers will not feel the same. After all, we’re all different and sometimes our reading tastes don’t match, so please keep in mind that it’s only my opinion.

That being out of the way now, I’m going to be brutally honest. I really disliked this book.

It’s rare when it happens, but when it happens, I just want to put it aside and forget. While the premise caught my attention, the execution is quite messy. At this point, I can’t even see what the author is trying to do and where the plot is going or even how it’s built. I know, it’s rather harsh, but I truly think this book should have been more polished to better showcase the plot and also the set of characters.

I’m one to enjoy stories told from no more than 2 POVs and in this very short first installment, there are several POVs. Right out of the bat I can tell you there are at least 4 POVs. 4. Without order or anything.

Also, the different voices aren’t interesting. The different narrations are long, flat and don’t exactly reflect the characters’ voice. It’s the issue I think turned me off the most.

Also, while I love Lucy and Holden’s pasts and the fact that they’re not truly interacting with each other yet, I think the author doesn’t delve deep enough in their characterization. I think the issue comes mainly from the multiple POVs and the weak narration. Otherwise, I’m pretty sure I could have been caught up in this story.

I like the few hints about the sub-plots, but the stakes don’t feel high enough for the main characters to actually make me want to read more of this serial. I should be curious at least, but I’m not that much. Probably because some of Lucy’s inner musings were quite repetitive which is, again, an issue that turned me off. Since the format is short, it’s difficult to have repetitions and not expect the readers to be frustrated and annoyed by this.

I’m not going to write more, but truly, this book missed the mark for me and it saddens me. I’m usually quite easy to please when it comes to books so it’s always difficult for me write such a review. Maybe you’ll enjoy it and think I’m crazy for disliking this book. 🙂

 

RATING:

 

1.5 to 20140103-095135.jpg for the effort.

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